Hey man a real solid composition you got here! I just have some constructive criticism for you, i hope you dont mind.
Right now I feel the song is a little empty. Yes you have wonderful composition, rich piano, but all your frequencies/synths/hi-hats seem to be in the higher end with only your kick and piano dwelling in the lower end. Where's the bass/fx? It just sounds a little unbalanced in my opinion. Another tip is that you can change up your drum loop every 8/16 bars or something to give it a little variety.
This is my opinion though! You've got talent that's for sure. The mixing sounded great, composition all made sense, it just felt a little empty to me.
Hope you didnt take offense to this, just try to help a fellow artist out!
Keep it up, have a good one
Hey man, no offense taken, I love constructive criticism, helps me to get better!
I'll taken everything you said on board, clearly from other reviews I need to work on bass ends a lot more. Thanks though for taking the time to listen and review :D
Really like the beginning but it overall doesn't feel full enough!
Put a small reverb/delay on the intro arppegio to give it some room.
Liking the big chords though but I think they might be a bit too loud! Would also love to see a bass added in here to beef it up! Overall solid work, i know it's still a work in progress but it's still got some ways to go! Keep at it!
Thanks for the review! I'll keep your suggestions in mind. ^^
definietly not worth the score it has...
hey man! I'm really like this song! Love the sytrus present 'growl' and you used it so melodically!
One suggestion i have is that you have no FX! No crashes or sweeps! if you add those in they will really fill up your song.. for example, the transition at 1:59 is really abrupt and there isnt anything there that leads me into the next stage of the song.. a sweep or a wind FX would work wonders there.
Overall great track, this song really speaks volumes about your musical development... Your starting to get the hang of it ;)
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-Steven Ortiz (Dj-Unknown)
I'm squealing like a school girl again XD
Thanks a lot for your feedback. And your advice is noted! All I need to do is find the sweeps, unless sweep is just the term for an inverted crash...lolll
Funny how you specificaly indentified the synth I used :P
in any case, your feedback is mucho mucho appreciated, thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaanks!
i remember the first time i heard this song it damn near brought tears to my eyes and you my friend have succeeded in capturing the mellow beauty of it. and for that i congratulate you =]
Thanks a lot man, I'm surprised I'm getting a review two years in the future. Its like a time warp.
I love the looming atmospheric strings in the background and the piano 1:15 is magical. I'm really digging the crazy progression at 1:45 but the note at 1:53 is a little screechy for me. If your using FL studio, slap an Parametric equalizer and just the high end just a tad. hahaha i love the sax or whatever that is at the end, it's a nice contrast to the rest of the song, very down and droppy.
Overall fantastic work, the score it has now is unfortunately the result of zero bombers and it deserves much better.
Keep up the great work =]
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-Steven Ortiz (Dj-Unknown)
Cheers, nice getting a review from someone who's work i admire! Sadly i'm using garageband, and yes it is a sax at the end. Thanks for the review and score!
Very catch drums right off the start.. I like that high synth you bring in, seems very out of this world. I didnt really like the synth you bring in at 1:26.. maybe go with a light saw? Or a pluck? 2:09 is nice very repetitive and groovin. I like the ending pads alot
Overall solid work, keep it up!
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-Steven Ortiz (Dj-Unknown)
well, I was aiming for something very electric for the first synth, and the second one, I was aiming for something piano-like, in this case a pluck.
Thanks for the review though, I really appreciate constructive reviews like yours, I mean it.
(like I replied to your mail, I will check out your songs, tomorrow though, cuz it's late...and I'm getting tired...)
Truly a pirate!!
Right off the bat i was hooked. When the drop happened i was initially a little unsure because the bass in on the kick instead of off-beat but it grew on me and you made it work! Now im at the break and i love the strings/trumpet combo it fits perfectly.. you build it back up into the melody and jump us right back into the groove..
Great job overall and i hope to see much more from you!
Welcome back =]
hey man, welcome back to newgrounds! You got a pretty good song going on here. Only thing that could be improved on would be diversity. It tends to get repetitive. i did like that downplaying synth at 2:08. The ending was good, a simple low energy fading out ending....
Overall song had very good elements, the panning hi-hats, low grumbling sounds, the eerie melodies. But extreamly repetitive. Work on having more diverse sounds...
Keep up the awesome work. Oh and i dont think you lost any skill =P
yeah i know what you mean, i found myself jumping through sections cuz i was getting bored of them while editing....probably a clue....haha, dont worry ill edit it again, make it a song actually worth listening to....haha
The lead you chose fit perfectly into the song, same with the arps. you beginning could've have been better than just the bongos and the bass.
I'm at the break now and i'm loving it, kick, bass, and a very light arp... at 2:30 now it is pretty repetitive.
I dont have much to say about this song and i'm not sure why =P ummm it's really good, my only complaint that i have is that volume is overall too loud, and the repetition is about much, you could've had a bigger finale.
Great job and i hope to see more in the future,
Check out my newest song [Dj-U] Radical Thought
thanks alot for your review....ill give a peek on your tracks...peace
This song kicks ass! But i'm going to have to disagree with Bahdshah, i loved the pan flute, where did you get that instrument? Is it in nexus? or jut another sample.
The beginning was good, but i dont like how you introduced the beginning, with the snares, i think you could've started it with just the drums, and the pad, with the crash fx.
Vocals were very very good, and they did add that professional feel to it.
Overall extremely good song 9/10 and 5/5
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Yep, the pan flutes are a preset of Nexus. I don't remember if it comes in an expansion or if it's already in the presets that come with it...
Thanks a lot for the review!
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